I got up from the wrong side of the bed.
I got the tooth paste running out last night.
I got scald by my boiling milk during the breakfast time.
Before I went to class, I had a trip on a palnt yard of my school, then I went to clinic in the campus for appling a plaster.
When I got into the classroom, the teacher said "you are late" and asked me to be a volunteer for nex week job.
I thought I should go to buy a lottery for this unfortunate day.
I forgot to bring enough money, so I didn't have many choices of my lunch; futhermore, I had to walk home without transportation too, just because the money.
When I walked on the way home, the sky was going to rain, and I didn't bring my adorable umbrella with me.
I was dripping wet, and I was think I should buy a lottery for this unfortunate day.
When I got home, I took a bath to wash out all the unlucky things that happened on me.
And I totally forgot my appointment to the cinema with my boyfrind.
I rushed out the door, then the water of rain was splashing on my dress.
After I got to the cinema, my boyfriend called and said he was in trap of car accident which he couldn't watch the movie tonoght.
I thought I should buy a lottery for this unfortunate day.
I also thought I should better go straight home and have a dream on bed.
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You described that unlucky day clearly and it attracted readers very much.
Suggetions:The sentence"I was dripping wet, and I was think I should buy a lottery for this unfortunate day."I think "I was think"change to I thought would be much better^^
Your unlucky day was really unluck and you described it used many adjective and detail. It was clearly and wonderful.
The last paragraph could be more would be better.
You depict your artilcle very well. It is easy for readers to realize what do you want to say. But there is one thing you should pay little attention to that is the use of "the." For example, in this article you maintioned "When I walked on the way home...," there should not have "the" before way home.
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